帮我修改英语作文，我承认我英语不咋地，so帮我改好一点，我会给高分的。改好之后用word的方

帮我修改英语作文，我承认我英语不咋地，so帮我改好一点，我会给高分的。

改好之后用word的方式创建百度网盘分享链接。

第1个回答 2014-10-05

Hi Karen

Haven't been together for a long time. How are you doing ?

I am going to hold a party in my home, from 7 to 11 PM on Christmas Eve. I hope you and your family can come to the party. I am looking forward to your arrival.

I'll prepare many kinds of fruits, salad, snacks and your favorite Beijing Roust Duck. A lot of friends are invited and we can enjoy the night together. It will be in our very precouis memories.

RSVP requested

B. Rgds.

XXXX（your name）

评语：
首先，这是一个信函，应该有信函的基本格式
逻辑有点混乱。既然是邀请函，开头就应该开宗明义，提出邀请，而不是放到最后一段
有些小语法错误
表达上有浓重的中式英语特点（我改了一些，保留了一些）
RSVP就是邀请函中常用的“来不来都要跟我说一声”的意思，这个是邀请中最地道的表达
内容比较简单，就不百度链接了。给不给分无所谓，希望能帮到你。追问

书上要求120词，帮人帮到底，你随便写，只要符合题目就行，邀请Alex和他的家人参加圣诞晚会。

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Hi Karen

Haven't been together for a quite some time. How are you doing these days?

I will hold a dinner party in my home, from 7:00 to 11:30 PM on Christmas Eve. I sincerely invite you and your family to attend. Causual wear is suggested. The schedule is as follows:

7:00-8:00 dinner -Beijing Roust Duck will be served, together with fruits, salad, snacks ice cream ,cupcakes and coffee.
8:00-9:30 games - some traditional chinese party games help you make more friends
9:30-10:00 luck draw - a little gift will hold your memory of this night forever
10:00-11:30 movie show - transformer IV

A lot of friends are invited and we can enjoy the night together. besides, your arrival is highly expected.

RSVP requested. And I will make the arrangement accordingly

Thanks and B. Rgds.

Gary

第2个回答 2014-10-05

能不能给你发图片？追问

可以，只要改好就行

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Hi,Kevin.We had not already seen each other for a long time.What's up?
I am going to hold a party in my home on Christmas Eve,from 7p.m. to11p.m.
On that day,I will prepare many kinds of fruits,vegetables,snacks,drinks and your favourite Beijing Roust Duck.And also I will invite any other friends. We can.play together,and do something interesting.It will be the most special and funny memory of us.
I hope you will come with your family.If you can not attend to the Christmas party,please reply to me before 10th Dec.But however,I really hoping that you can come.

第3个回答 2014-10-05

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改一改your favourite to your favourite food.

Many friends 改去many of our friends

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书上要求120词，帮人帮到底，帮我扩展一点。只要符合题目就行，邀请Karen和他的家人参加圣诞晚会。

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等我一下

我给你的应该有一百多个字了

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最后一段之前加一段
During the party, there will be a present exchanging session. You can also prepare some presents and join the activity. It would be a fun session and you can also make some new friends there.

Should be more than 120 already

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图片再发一遍，看不清楚

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