5, 这句话有语法错误吗？ 应该如何改正啊？

Question

Furthermore studying abroad can broaden my horizon. In my leisure time, I like to read books. I believe that reading books can broaden my horizon. Unfortunately, my Chinese university limited we students to borrow books, which means we just can borrow 2 books within 1 month. Sometimes I can finish 2 books within one week, so when I wanted to change the books with others , the librarian told me that if I wanted to borrow other books, I needed to wait a month, which was so terrible for me. And one month later, when I came back to the library, I often found that the books that I desired had already been borrowed by others. On the contrary, the U library can allow us to borrow no matter how many books we want. Moreover there are a variety of books in the U library,which can open a new horizon for me to devoting myself to the ocean of knowledge.

Answer 1

Furthermore （，）studying abroad can broaden my horizon. In my leisure time, I like to（like reading,like doing表习惯） read books.（你说的有点罗嗦了，加个because） I believe that reading books (改成them)can broaden my horizon. Unfortunately, my Chinese university（？） limited we students（两个词改成us,宾语） to borrow books, which means we just can（can just） borrow (改成hold,borrow是短暂行动词，不能两个月都在借啊)2 books within（for） 1 month. Sometimes I can finish(加reading) 2 books within（最好用in） one week, so when I wanted to change the books with others , the librarian told me that if I wanted to borrow other books, I needed(need) to wait (加for)a month, which was so terrible for(改成to) me. And one month later, when I came back to the library（one month later这样放后面就更好了）, I often（坚决去掉它！） found that the books that（改成which） I desired had already been borrowed by others. On the contrary, the U library can（去掉） allow us to borrow no matter how many books we want. Moreover（，） there are a variety of books in the U library,which can open a new horizon for me to devoting（devote） myself to the ocean of knowledge.

Answer 2

ek, so when I wanted to change the books with others , the librarian told me that if I wanted to borrow other books, I needed to wait a month, which was so terrible for me. And one month later, when I came back to the library, I often found that the books that I desired had already been borrowed by others. On the contrary, the U library can allow us to borrow no matter how many books we want. Moreover there are a variety of books in the U library,which can open a new horizon for me to devoting myself to the ocean of knowledge.本回答被提问者采纳

Answer 3

I like to read 应该为 I like reading
we student 应该为 us student
devoting 应该为 to devote