一家英语报社向中学生征文,主题是“十年后的我”,请根据下列要点和你的畅想完成短文。1.家庭:2.工作:3.业余生活。注意:1.词数100左右:2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯:3.开头语已为你写好。One possible version:
One possible version: I often imagine what my life would be like in the future . I think my life will be very different in ten years .i will be twenty –eight years old by then . I will have my own family , probably with a lovely child . I hope I will work in a computer company as a program designer . I will enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues . I’will do a good job in whatever I do .In my free time , I will continue to take regular exercise , such as swimming , running and various ball games . On my holidays , I will travel around the world .In a word , my life will be much richer and more colorful . |
试题分析:本文是一篇记叙文,主题是“十年后的我”。在写作时要注意从家庭、工作和业余生活三方面要点着手,因为提示信息较少,所以要充分发挥想象,增加适当的细节以使行文连贯,充实内容。比如可以联想到的内容有健身,度假,聚会等等。在写作时尽量使用恰当的连接词,插入语以使文章层次分明,使用多种句式结构和高级词汇亮点来提高文章的档次,如定语从句,宾语从句和状语从句等。此外,因为是畅想未来,所以要用一般将来时。 【亮点说明】本篇范文短小精悍,要点全面,语言简练,时态人称准确,很好的完成了写作任务。在文章开头作者紧扣题目,提出自己对未来的畅想,然后从生活,工作,家庭三个方面描述了自己十年后的生活。在文中作者用到了短语In my free time , In a word , such as等介词短语,避免了文章句式的单一。此外,还用到了宾语从句in whatever I do、I will work in a computer company as a program designer等,这些都给朴素的语言带来了亮点。 |