请大家帮我看下我这篇高考英语作文可以得多少分（总分25）

Question

Mind Your Behavior in Public Places Last sunday, I went sightseeing with my friends in the Fairy Lake Park. It was sunny,I talked with my friends and walked along the bank of theFairy Lake Park. suddenly,I saw a boy and a girl boating in the lake,andthey were eating sock throwing about the plastic bags in th lake."what abeautiful sight" the girl said. " if you feel that the sight is beautiful,you are not supposed to damage it " I thought angrily "Now that ,there is also a sign that has you know that don't throw about litter" In my opinion, In Public places,we had better behave. In case everyone doesn't behave the Public rules,the Pubic Places is out of control.Protecting Publice places is also protecting our home.
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Answer 1

你好，同学。我帮你修改一下吧

It was sunny, Talking with my friends, I walked along the bank of the Fairy Lake Park. Suddenly, I saw a boy and a girl boating in the lake. And they were eating sock and throwing the plastic bags in the lake. "What a beautiful sight!" said the girl. "If you feel that the sight is beautiful, you shouldn't damage it." I thought angrily. " In addition, there is also a sign NO LITTERING on it.
In my poinion, In public places, we had better behave properly. In case evryone doesn't obey the public rules, the public places will be out of control. Protecting public places is also protecting our home.

总体来说，你的作文写的不错，主题明确，立意新颖。只是句子中有几处错误，改正过来了。

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老师谢谢了 改的很不错

Answer 2

15分左右

你这应该是福建卷

句型不太多
文中也有病句

请继续加油